"She's Practical Not Pretty" : FAWM

She's Practical Not Pretty

6 days ago by @kc_

There is no demo for this song.

Liner Notes

#needscollab Quick write in the box below. There's some good in here I think. I like the first line and the first lines of the 2nd verse. As is the order is out of sync I think. All can be worked out later... or not! :-)

Lyrics

V I She's practical not pretty My favorite summer fling Always fun to run with just necessities no bling

Never says a word if I'm out and it's not her It's just about the time together There's no pot to stir

V II Every summer I make the promise This will be the last but the past becomes the future Our summer roles recast

Smoldering coals 'cross the westward sky I'll take you to the moon A bow and Christmas lights at night afterglow that ends too soon

V III I've never had another who can do the things you do Feel last night's sway throughout the day sometimes it makes me shudder (this need finessing... Like the intent)

took me to places I've never went Sometime's it's straight sometimes it's bent sometimes in the morning I'm weak in the knees After we laid up at night on a warm summer breeze

Comments

@chipwithrow 4d

Good one! Gives me nostalgic summer vibes. Sharp writing, good rhymes. My quick-fix suggestion for 3rd verse is to switch the first two lines: Who can do the things you do? I've never had another

@newukenewyork 5d

I like where you're going with this. I feel the push-and-pull of what might happen next, in terms of the story. I hope you keep at it!

@kc_ 5d

Thanks so much. Always appreciate your input and encouragement! Great guitar work BTW!!

@newukenewyork 4d

you're too kind! ;) Gotta learn at least 10 more chords.

@robinleaf 5d

I like this a lot! You evoke the feeling of a repeated casual connection really well.

Easy fix for that line you want to finesse;

Sometimes it makes me shudder, too

I think it works, if you are keeping the shift to second person there (otherwise you'd have a different rhyming word to worry about of course). 🤷‍♀️

If I didn't have a backlog of four sets of lyrics since last night (besides like 12 sets I have on a list from before the sprint!), I would offer to do something with this. I hope someone picks it up!

@coolparadisoTEAM 5d

She sounds pretty good to me! This bit really jumped at me "Smoldering coals 'cross the westward sky I'll take you to the moon A bow and Christmas lights at night afterglow that ends too soon" nice one