FAWM: "I Do Not Feel Fine"

I Do Not Feel Fine

There is no demo for this song.

Liner Notes

I didn't intend to do the "Reply to an existing song" challenge, but this just sort of appeared. It's pretty rough, and I don't know if the title will stay, but I think there's some promise. I'm looking forward to handing this over to Rand to see what he does with it.

#lyricsonly #replychallenge

Lyrics

I thought there was supposed to be an earthquake? I wish that I were not afraid. Don’t know where to go or what to do [I think we need another line)] Wish that it were obvious I didn’t know it’d be like this

Chorus: Frog in the pot, slowly boiling alive Sinking in the quicksand I didn’t know I stepped in House slowly filling up with carbon monoxide And I do not feel fine

It isn’t with a bang, but with a whimper Like the poet said Uh oh, here we go, we’ll never know If we can try to save ourselves How to serve our own needs I listen while our souls bleed

Chorus: Frog in the pot, slowly boiling alive Asleep in my bed while the flames burn higher Washed away with current, and no one knows I’m drowning And I do not feel fine

In a tournament of lies, everybody loses The vitriolic, patriotic fighting words consume us In a tournament of lies, everybody loses I did not choose this. I did not choose this.

Chorus: Frog in the pot, slowly boiling alive Falling off a cliff in my dreams, will I hit the bottom? House slowly filling up with carbon monoxide And I do not feel fine

I do not feel fine I do not feel fine

Comments

@unownedart 5d

Hopefully writing this was at least a bit cathartic. I particularly relate to the line "Falling off a cliff in my dreams, will I hit the bottom?" (I don't know: I wake up and can't get back to sleep.)

@janeg 6d

You speak for so many! The whole world is losing in this tournament of lies.

@edwinb 1w

That's some great lyrics in the chorus and I especially like the frog in the pot line. I look forward to hearing this one!

@quadrivium 1w

God, I am feeling this right now, Erin. "Wish that it were obvious /I didn't know it'd be like this." That line pairing is especially striking. I too am interested to see what you and Rand do with the words!

@eringoblog 1w

Thank you, Mary! This one may be a record for me in terms of idea to more-or-less complete lyric. (Getting it to a complete demo with music might take a little longer...lol)

@jmcdaid 2w

Grabs with the opening line, stealthily slips in the callbacks, and hammers it in the tournament of lies verse. Well done. I could imagine an interesting inversion of the descant at the end...

@eringoblog 1w

Thank you so much, John.

@eringoblog 2w

This is weird but I’m leaving a comment to change the link’s preview image. Thanks for the feedback!

@newukenewyork 2w

Whew, the chorus really layers on the dreadful, building danger. I can relate to the "I do not feel fine," as so many can right now (and not ONLY right now) in the world. Great write.

@eringoblog 1w

I appreciate your feedback, Jenny. Thanks!

@cathymc 2w

You express what so many of us are feeling! Great imagery and so relatable. I can't wait to hear this set to music. [fistbump of solidarity in not feeling fine]

@eringoblog 1w

Thank you, Cathy! fist bump

@catetaylor 2w

Hiya Some interesting rhyming patterns and lines that run off the tongue so nicely. Particularly like the verse that comes after the second chorus and feels like a bridge. The title grabbed my attention too. Be curious to hear what music you put to it.

@eringoblog 1w

Thanks so much for your feedback!