FAWM: "I Owe You a Good-Bye"

I Owe You a Good-Bye

Skirmish: Distinctly Human* (@zinnithequeen)

There is no demo for this song.

Liner Notes

The Human feeling of Moral Regret #rock #needsmusic #skirmish #lyricsonly

Lyrics

[Verse 1] I admit, I put off a call Put it simple, I dropped the ball Thought, I had so much time Bells of regret, hear them chime [Verse 2] Kept saying, just one more day Now you’re gone, no day left to take Forever gone, came too fast Pain in my heart, it’s gonna last [Pre Chorus] Need to say these words, I’m gonna try I owe you this…I owe you a Good-Bye [Chorus] I owe you a Good-Bye Take your wings, and fly You were there, when I felt alone I would’ve said this, if I’d known You were, my guiding light I should’ve said this, instead of fight You brought me up, to be strong I could’ve changed, feel so wrong I’ll always love you, this I cry I owe you this…I owe you a Good-Bye I owe you this…I owe you a Good-Bye [Verse 3] Now, every memory’s, a knife Beating myself up, every night I need to be done, with the Why’s Because I owe you, this Good-Bye [Chorus] I owe you a Good-Bye Take your wings, and fly You were there, when I felt alone I would’ve said this, if I’d known You were, my guiding light I should’ve said this, instead of fight You brought me up, to be strong I could’ve changed, feel so wrong I’ll always love you, this I cry I owe you this…I owe you a Good-Bye I owe you this…I owe you a Good-Bye [Verse 4] You were there, taught me everything I just forgot, to make your phone ring Another lesson, that rang true Here’s my Good-Bye, laced with I love you [Chorus] I owe you a Good-Bye Take your wings, and fly You were there, when I felt alone I would’ve said this, if I’d known You were, my guiding light I should’ve said this, instead of fight You brought me up, to be strong I could’ve changed, feel so wrong I’ll always love you, this I cry I owe you this…I owe you a Good-Bye I owe you this…I owe you a Good-Bye…

Comments

@paulharrison 30m

Wow...that was from a skirmish? Great job! This is very touching...sad for both the person who didn't get the call/visit and for the narrator who has to deal with regret. The lyrics do "work" well as they are and it's amazing you did that quickly. But if you are still playing with it, I would experiment to see if you can be more specific in verses 3 and 4. That is, you illustrate well how the narrator feels and general things about what the departed did, but often the listener can internalize the emotion better via specific examples. Maybe something specific that was taught, or an example of what the departed person did. I hope that makes sense and that I'm not overreaching in commenting. You seem to really have a knack for writing and that might be a fun area to dabble in. Anyway, happy FAWMing!