FAWM: "Sometimes You Swerve"

Sometimes You Swerve

Skirmish: Chocolate (@ajna1960)

Liner Notes

8:30am: Found the skirmish for #chocolate with 8 minutes to go. Coming in hot (late) by posting this at 13 past the hour. Maybe needs a third verse? Or a sweet touch on the bridge?

Update 7:25pm Draft one of melody demoed. It’s not where I want it yet. I dunno. I feel like some of this melody I’ve written before.

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Lyrics

V1 Summer I turned fifteen, Driver's Ed was in a trailer Back of school, around the corner from the zoo Where the peacocks could escape Sit above us in the trees And scream out cautions overhead like we were fools, I was a fool And if I recall correctly, so were you

CHORUS: Slamming dishes under water in the double sink Tilt my head a little more to take a longer drink Dig the chocolate with the bloom out of the cabinet Tell myself it isn't time, we haven't got there yet But I'm stressing as you're pressing Every nerve Sometimes you drive straight through the obstacle Sometimes you swerve, sometimes you swerve

V2 Rarely on the road I see a ghosty little car White Citation -- that was your ride way back then I could only drive a stick If we didn't go too far And you were always pushing me to get back in I got back in I don't know why we thought that we could win

BRIDGE: I tried not to make left turns You thought you were right We could've stopped -- the signs were more than clear Kept rolling through them, barely looking Turn the heater up Neither one of us was ever fit to steer

Comments

@andygetch 12h

Oh this brings back memories of Drivers Ed class. I like how the driving story alternates with a kitchen scene leaving a bit of mystery.

@newukenewyork 1d

Thank you to my lyrics-only commenters on “Sometimes You Swerve.” There is now a first attempt at melody demo posted. @ajna1960 @acousticmaddie @atam94 @musicsongwriter @feb21sundari @hmstreetteam

@ajna1960 1d

Very nice lyric. I couldn't help wondering throughout if the whole was a metaphor for a very stormy relationship that was basically sound.

@newukenewyork 1d

I think it absolutely could be! It's another song in which I'm writing from an alternate reality -- real memories that end up a different place than they have in reality. They could be okay, and they also might not be, same as when there's a deer in the road in front of your car...

Thanks for the insightful comment. :)

@acousticmaddie 2d

Cool lyric and great job in that short amount of time. I can feel the frustration in the lyrics and the meotional press many of us tend to put on ourself in the every day life. Well done

@newukenewyork 1d

Thanks for reading through "Sometimes You Swerve" I am looking forward to returning to it.

@atam94 2d

ooh very nice!! The bridge lyrics are great!

@newukenewyork 2d

Thank you! I’ve written a somewhat related lyric in another song, but different enough, I think.

@musicsongwriter 2d

Creative lyrics and take on the prompt. I don't think they need more lines. I hope you demo them.

@newukenewyork 2d

Thank you very much for the encouragement on my “chocolate” prompt song!

@feb21sundari 2d

That sounds like an exciting story. I don't understand the part about the chocolate ring; does it really exist? Is it a donut? ...or a figment of the imagination?

@newukenewyork 2d

Hmmm... There's no chocolate ring. "The chocolate with the bloom" in the cabinet is just old chocolate ("bloom" is a white coating that surfaces on old chocolate) that this narrator is stress eating, wondering if her marriage is doomed. But good feedback for me to know that's confusing in translation, thanks for reading and commenting! ;)