WhatsApp

by @berni1954

Skirmish: Page 237 (@gruvmachine)
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Liner Notes

The nearest book to hand for me was"The Complete Poems of Emily Dickinson". On page 237 - there is a cute poem in which she addresses a letter she has written to an unnamed person.

I decided to try and catch some of the feel of the original while putting it firmly into a 21st C. context.

#neglected12string Original poem by Emily Dickinson is #494 in that collection.

It originally had three verses, but I hadn't time for another. I already started late.

Here is the original Going to him! Happy letter! Tell him – Tell him the page I didn’t write; Tell him I only said the syntax, And left the verb and the pronoun out. Tell him just how the fingers hurried, Then how they waded, slow, slow, slow; And then you wished you had eyes in your pages, So you could see what moved them so.

Tell him it wasn’t a practised writer, You guessed, from the way the sentence toiled; You could hear the bodice tug, behind you, As if it held but the might of a child; You almost pitied it, you, it worked so. Tell him – No, you may quibble there, For it would split his heart to know it, And then you and I were silenter.

Tell him night finished before we finished, And the old clock kept neighing ‘day!’ And you got sleepy and begged to be ended – What could it hinder so, to say? Tell him just how she sealed you, cautious, But if he ask where you are hid Until to-morrow, – happy letter! Gesture, coquette, and shake your head!

Lyrics

Intro: (F) (G) (Am)

(Am) Oh short and sweet WhatsApp I just (G) wrote You're (Em) for a lass on whom I long to (Am) dote Tell her this is not what I meant to (G) say Though the (Em) grammar I believe is quite O(Am)K The (F) verbs I needed wouldn't come to my (C) mind So I (G) used some that auto correct de(Am)fined My (F) hurried fingers sometimes missed a (C) beat While (G) thoughts slowed down as a biscuit I did (Am) eat

It's a (Em) pity that pages have no (Am) eyes To (Em) let her know what's truth and what is (Am) lies But (F) if she reads you and she gives a (C) sigh Then she'll (G) know that I'll be with her (Am) by and by

(Am) I'm not much of an author, that I (G) know But you'll (Em) see that when you read the junk I (Am) wrote But the effort I put in you'll never (G) see I'm a (Em) bit of a letdown romantical(Am)ly She must (F) read between the lines to know my (C) heart If she (G) smiles at my crap poetry that's a (Am) start So (F) fly oh Whatsapp at the speed of (C) light For my (G) loves alone with silence here to(Am)night

It's a (Em) pity that pages have no (Am) eyes To (Em) let her know what's truth and what is (Am) lies But (F) if she reads you and she gives a (C) sob You'll know (G) happily that you have done your (Am) job

Comments

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so this is what emily might have written had she lived in our time rather than hers. ver interesting to compare the two sets of lyrics, makes me wonder what the emilys of tomorrow will be writing.

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I was an E.D. fan boy as a youth. I even went to her grave and put flowers on it during my first visit to the U.S.

Emily today would probably have a Social Media account with hundreds of likes from appreciative fans. Also, she might not have remained the lonely spinster, thanks to Tinder or its equivalent.

I know she often claims to enjoy her spinsterhood, but a lot of her work hints at suppressed desires or an acceptance of her lot that she may not have felt if she had been around today.

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Very clever to do what you did and make it coherent and interesting. I like the slower deliver with that really pushy uke

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This is a clever use of classic material. Also envying your 12 (but mine is to come home tomorrow.... we'll see if it's working again!)

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This is a great transition from Emily Dickinson to current day format for a letter and successfully keeps her playfulness I think. (and bravo as a skirmish!)

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Wow in one hour. Great idea and the sound is awesome

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Wow. You got so much in there in (less than) an hour! What a great lyric direction to take, from Emily Dickenson to WhatApp (!).

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Very clever how you brought this current! I love the sort of Irish sound. Great skirmish!

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I am an Irish Citizen - but I have hardly ever lived there. However, my childhood home in Nigeria was filled with Irish folk and bluegrass - so they are major influences.

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