FAWM: "Back Down"

Back Down

1 week ago by @ramblin_rover

Back Down

ramblin_rover

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Liner Notes

#singersongwriter #rock

Lyrics

I’ve traded punches a time or two A couple times in my mis-spent youth I should’ve listened instead to you But I don’t back down but I don’t back down back down

How ‘bout dancing a song with me If you like it we’ll make it three I ain’t afraid to get on my feet So just take my hand baby take my hand my hand

Prob’ly thinking I shouldn’t be Talking to you while I look like me I ain’t the best lookin’ guy you’ll see But I don’t back down but I don’t back down back down

I should ask you to marry me We could plant us a family tree Or just be happy with you and me Or if that’s too soon we’ll just get a room get a room

If you say no it might make me cry But I will listen and say goodbye But if it’s yes you will see me try And I don’t back down and I don’t back down back down

I’m a man you should get to know My story’s long and I tell it slow You could join in and make it grow Tell the truth or a lie tell a truth or lie tell a lie

The bar is closing it’s time to go You can choose either fast or slow Leave together or tell me no But I don’t back down but I don’t back down back down

But I don’t back down but I don’t back down back down

Comments

@troubadette 11h

This is a lot of fun! I really liked these lyrics:

How ‘bout dancing a song with me If you like it we’ll make it three

I feel like giving this one a full instrumentation treatment with drums and keys coming in at different points would help with getting some variety in it as others have mentioned. But as we all know, the real win is getting the song out into the universe, and you've done that beautifully!

@sadcoolgirl 1d

wow the lyrics hooked me before i even heard it and then hearing it all together made it all that much better. your vocals are really delightful and bright here, but also soft and warm. the guitar is a lovely touch as well. nicely done!

@scubed 1w

Great lyrics and catchy groove! The rhyme scheme and rhythmic cadence of the lyrics sit really well with the strumming pattern and bass line.

@darrylgregory 1w

This is a love song for sure! The rhythm reminds me of that Steeler’s Wheels song ‘Stuck In The Middle”. The rhyme scheme makes it fun!

I agree with tamsnumber4 that you need some variation. I wouldn’t change the lyrics, but maybe alternate verses with a different melodic line/chord change/rhythmic change?

@ramblin_rover 1w

Great suggestions! Thanks for the critique! I agree, and look forward to recording this one again with all these good suggestions!

@chrisshepard 1w

The repeated won't back downs sell the song. This is one that perhaps should see a full treatment. It would be a good road trip song out west...maybe to the Valley!

@tamsnumber4 1w

"We could plant us a family tree", really like this line and also love the repeated lines at the end. It's a good write with a nice story flow. This could take a bridge or a few lines sung a different way for variety, just some ideas, but great write and delivery!

@ramblin_rover 1w

Exactly how I feel. It gets repetitive. More chord voicing variety, a bridge, solo breaks… it’s tough say “good enough for now” and move on!

@resonut123 1w

I also like the repetition of the last line of the verses. Simple to the point lyric that goes with the music and your vocal phrasing well. I really liked these lines... "How ‘bout dancing a song with me, If you like it we’ll make it three" "Prob’ly thinking I shouldn’t be, Talking to you while I look like me"

@zecoopMod 1w

I love the pace of the vocal and that repeated bit at the end of each verse is great. It has a very classic feel, kinda like a bit of Lou Reed in its matter of fact-ness. "Or if that’s too soon we’ll just get a room" brought a big smile. Really enjoyed this song!