The Bridge, The Dead End, The Flame
NSFW Challenge: FOOD!Liner Notes
I'm not at all sure about this song structure. Everything is connected, but the connections are loose enough that it seems like there's no obvious order they fit together in. I might see it later, when it's no longer freshly written. Edit: I switched the rap and the bridge.
This might be the most loosey-goosey #rap I've ever written too. There's not much in the way of rhymes or consistency of meter, but I think it mostly works anyway.
Wrote this for the Oracle Challenge (https://fawm.org/forums/4184). I am The Latecomer, obviously. I also had in mind when writing it that it should be something to go on the "am I cooked?" album I'm working on (https://tinyurl.com/amicooked-album).
Lyrics
[Chorus] I thought I'd build a bridge I built a wall I built a wall I built a wall around my heart and pushed you all out If you won't love me well then leave me all alone
[Verse 1] Life is over Over and over But it always goes on the next day It never stops even if you can't find the way We're all so desperately looking for Why are we doing this to ourselves? We're still alive So why do we scramble to open doors When we've never hit a dead end yet?
[Chorus] I thought I'd build a bridge I built a wall I built a wall I built a wall around my heart and pushed you all out If you won't love me well then leave me all alone
[Rap] There was never enough For me to eat But I ate down In private Never enough for me to sell my awesome Couldn't tell anyone What I could see In me But I could eat Forever if you would let me I could beat the pants off of anybody So many teenage boys with their jaws dropped and me still hungry with my mouth full of pancakes Silently screaming for someone to notice But it's okay No longer those days At least I think I've got it figured out this time If I work hard enough, eat right long enough Maybe I'll be strong enough To walk right out there and endure their indifference Maybe I'm too different but maybe I'll find someone When I have the strength to look I stopped living in book-worlds but I'm not shaped right to live in a society Out there where everybody's dieting And I just want more and more I could eat the world, I could make a world I'm too good But they can't see that They just see all the ways I can't be that Picture in their heads of what a person's s'posed to be but nobody can But that's not what I'm trying But they all got blinders on, straight and narrow even when you can't move We all too big for this shit But you gotta want to Otherwise you're not doing it right Apparently But I had no one to parent me Through the brainwashing stage, I missed that memo while it had a chance to take Now my brain's Wide open space, Big and emptier than you'd think, as the space between thoughts expands like the big bang no matter how fast I try to fill it, Still so hungry Guess that's just me
[Chorus] I thought I'd build a bridge I built a wall I built a wall I built a wall around my heart and pushed you all out If you won't love me well then leave me all alone
[Bridge] You light up every room You're in by yourself Learn to see your light When you're with someone else
[Chorus] I thought I'd build a bridge I built a wall I built a wall I built a wall around my heart and pushed you all out If you won't love me well then leave me all alone
[Verse 2] Life is over Over and over Get over it
Comments
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I kind of feel like that's the way to go with a rap section inserted into a song, pick a topic that's tangentially related. So it gives you a whole different perspective on whatever it is you've been talking about when you realize how it ties in.
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I love the way you brought those three cards together! The way the four different viewpoints interlock in these lyrics is really interesting, and food is so often a way that relationship tensions get played out that the rap feels highly appropriate while also taking me a little bit by surprise. The bridge is an unusual take on someone lighting up a room, really like that you've flipped it on its head from what I'm used to (lighting it up for someone else). Thank you for playing!