FAWM: "I Felt Nothing"

I Felt Nothing

11 hours ago by @erubenst

I Felt Nothing

erubenst

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Liner Notes

#poem #guitar #piano #violin

Lyrics

Scrolling through depressing posts While billionaires raise another toast And I felt nothing

Scrawny hungry teenager so thin Cigarette burns across his skin And I felt nothing

Another war among impoverished nations Another senseless brutal assassination And I felt nothing

An old growth forest goes up in flames Elephants hunted for ivory with no shame And I felt nothing

Another scathed terrorized city Another boat of tortured people And I felt nothing

This is what we’ve turned to A people who looks away from ugliness And feel nothing

When fellow humans are inhumane When prayers to god are all in vein When those in charge shirk their duty Safe there in their bigotry

And feel nothing And see nothing And say nothing And do nothing

For its Safer than feeling fear Safer than feeling anger Safer than feeling terror Safer than feeling at all

To look in the mirror and see nothing To turn on the radio and hear nothing To open your eyes and hope for nothing Then we are truly lost

Feeling takes courage Feeling takes patience Feeling take strength But we feel nothing.

Comments

@gilbo 5h

Great song with excellent lyrics and superb choice of 'backdrop' to showcase those lyrics and the message contained within. The vocal delivery too was great, making the point without being over-theatrical which would have detracted from the message imo. My only comments would be, as the guitar riff has created that framework, I think there is a more "space" for the lines of the lyrics to 'breath', some kind of feel almost rushed, and they dont have to be because the space has been created for them. Also, and this is a personal preference kind of thing, I think the section: For its Safer than feeling fear Safer than feeling anger Safer than feeling terror Safer than feeling at all could be even more effective as a bridge with a subtle change to the guitar riff, maybe dropping it down to a few select notes for this passage, then resuming for the final verses and outro sections. Great song!

@erubenst 5h

Thank you-- Yes, I agree with everything you suggested. I was definitely struggling with the phrasing and some of it does sound rushed. But I had hit the proverbial wall and was unsure how to remedy it...I will take up your excellent suggestions. Many thanks!