Down
by @john_p
Skirmish: Eight My Words (@tarahenton)
Liner Notes
Lyrics
Down [8 word Skirmish]
hold · light · break · run · pocket · fall · edge · still
It’s like I’m falling off the edge again and I can’t look down I see nothing but light my friend and no one’s around
Still I pocket up my fears and I hold to the ground I can’t break for night I’ll run til I fall down Oh down down
Should we have one more beer again or will the chaos take ground I can’t even feel the afterthoughts there’s not even a sound.
Still I pocket up my fears and I hold to the ground I can’t break for night I’ll run til I fall down Oh down down
Comments
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Really nice miniature John! All of the stanzas of your poetry have great meaning in them, and the first stanza is very literal — guess if you don’t look down, all you do is look up where all there is is light and hardly anyone is flying These days haha great tune, goodd skirmish
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You had me at the first line. Your voice is so captivating. So much emotion in this write. Great job.
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I love the dark country bluesy feel, 'pocket up my fears and hold onto the ground' really captures a feeling of uncertainty
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Really like the dark and moody vibe of this one. The chorus lyrics are especially strong. Great stuff 😊
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Beautiful guitar picking, and the way you included all eight words is stellar :)
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Your chorus captures the desperation at which the verses hint. Good skirmish.