Rhyme's Up

by @doglatin

Skirmish: That doesn't rhyme (@200ghosts)
Rhyme's Up
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Liner Notes

Thanks to @200ghosts for this skirmish prompt. It's really hard for me to write a song without having rhymes, so this was a challenge. When I write a line, I'm conditioned to follow it up with one that has a rhyme at the end of it. For this one, I did that, but then changed the last word, the one that rhymed with the previous line ending word, to a word or phrase that meant the same this, but avoided the obvious rhyme. I suppose the lyrics below could be used for some kind of worksheet exercise, with the heading "change the ending of every second line to one that rhymes with the line that precedes it." Of course the whole scenario falls apart at the end, when moon in june mode kicks in and takes over. #skirmish

Lyrics

RHYME’S UP ("That Doesn't Rhyme" skirmish)

You better say what you want to say, and say it now I can’t tell you exactly what that is or in what manner Just speak the truth and it will all become very clear Tell it from your heart, talk of all that is near and beloved Don’t try to be cute or force those rhymes It doesn’t have to be a poem every instance Too much time can be wasted on perfection You really don’t have to make so many adjustments Clear your head, just get your message straight About right or wrong, peace or war, love or loathing I ain’t no wordsmith or rhyming machine I like to wander where the grass is lush So just say what you need to say, say it today Don’t sweat the details it’ll be fine, come what ever Nobody likes to hear cliches howling at the moon And there’s a special place in hell for those who would end this with “June.” The perfect tune, gonna get there soon, crazy as a loon, moon in June Bonnie Doon, Daniel Boone, High Noon, silver spoon, in my room, bride and groom, psychedelic mushroom

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I absolutely love this approach. You can feel the rhymes approaching, and then you swerve and it's such fun. Great job!

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Ha! Yes, it is a little difficult to write a song without rhyming but this works well. The guitar and vocal sound very good.

I guess Time's Up for Rhyme's Up as you went a little crazy at the end there which is pretty Humorous!!!

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Delightful efforts to avoid rhymes! Straight and loathing especially caught my eye. Saw this just as I was struggling with rhymes in my next song.

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Thanks for listening. Paul Simon is one person who wrote some songs that had no rhymes, but they flow so well you don’t even notice it. I know there are others, but he’s the first one who comes to mind.

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