There's a Monster In My Heart

by @complexissimple

The demo for this song cannot be embedded.
FAWM takes no responsibility for the content of this link:
https://songcraft.io/song/song-d887df5d-5ece-435b-a51c-bc387276c31d

Liner Notes

This song was written by #improvisation, which basically means I sing a line and then pause the recording for a minute while I think of the next one because I am very slow at this (sometimes I even go look at Rhymezone for like five minutes). It also means I'm not able to go back when I flub the recording (there's one line in this that's particularly egregious because I accidentally added an extra syllable), or to listen and remind myself what I've written so far. I didn't have a single hope of repeating this chorus because I couldn't remember a word of it by the time it came around again.

This is going on this album https://tinyurl.com/amicooked-album

#amicooked-album #improv #vocal

Lyrics

[Verse 1] There's a monster in my heart that stirs in silence There's a vampire in my head that's out for blood And every road before me seems to lead to violence I only hope I can drag your name through the mud Along with mine

[Chorus] But there's an emptiness inside The cracks in my smile open wide The yawning void has teeth and understands the darkness I think I had just too much pride I thought this was something to hide But there's a pain and there's a healing in this sharpness And after all, you've got to answer to the darkness

[Verse 2] There's a monster in my heart that stirs in silence There's a feeling that I am just out of sight There's a self within the shadows and the violence And it's teeth and claws that get you through the night!

[Chorus] (0:27)

Comments

[pic]

Nice flow. And I like the lyrics to boot! Great work!!

[pic]
@apolez

I think I get what @rockstarsmd is saying. Use the chorus as verse one; then first verse as chorus; then rewrite verse 2 & sing the verse1 as chorus again!! At the end!! I think that would work better as well !! Great job though!! & weird , at the end , I was waiting for you to sing the “chorus” again & it never came.

[pic]

Wowie Zowie. That's really good!

IMHO the first verse is actually the chorus... and the chorus is the first verse. If I were producing your record I'd ask you to write another "verse" to be verse 2, and I'd repeat that chorus, maybe with the slight variation that is currently "verse 2" and you'd be off to the races!

Really, really good stuff!!!

[pic]

I think I like the structure of this one as it is, but I also think I should explore writing something else where the verses are more high-energy than the chorus. I didn't realize the extent to which I'd fallen into conventionality.

[FAWM]