crack! oh interesting vocal effects. more poppy style with all the repetition! you are really trying stuff here, really interesting structure as well. Not many but you could carry this off.

As a person who is fond of repetition I really liked this. The lights they blinded... part really struck me as a great line and really well sung too. A highlight of the song for me.

A nice blend of piano and vocals. I like the cadence!

I like your creative way you split it into parts, and I agree that first like of the bridge is really nice. Well done skirmish!

I see you have some songcrafting skills. Your meter is consistent, and your words are easily sung.

I like how you took the prompt and broke it down to develop one line at a time. Good work.

I like the piano/drum groove. Good hook on the "never ending story." My favorite part lyrically is the bridge - "if I could touch what I'm feeling, etc."

Such a great title! Love the doubling on the vocals. I definitely felt some of the movement/whimsy of the movie :)

I didn't notice any rust. Really great work!

Marthie! This is so good and I so enjoyed it!

Unusual structure: the "normal" four-line chorus with the short, tight verse. I agree that the bridge really ties everything down. The light piano work is wonderful too. Well done!!!

I like the doubled vocals on the chorus, and the short, punchy verses.

The bridge ties everything together perfectly, too.

I like the concise chorus. Nice use of lights camera and action structure.