Today's 10 minute write, this is rough but kind of fun to write so quick. It needs some love if it is going to make a song.

Tomorrow I Was..

VERSE
Tomorrow I was foolish.
My yesterdays are gone.
I’m clinging to a cliff edge.
I don’t think that I’ll hold on.
Summer days are faraways
And Winter’s on the peaks.
A blizzard strikes in from the North
I think I will repeat.

PRE_CHORUS
Tomorrow I was foolish.
Can you help me?
Save me?
Crave me?

CHORUS
I don’t need all that much.
Just a serpent’s fatal touch.
And Cleopatra’s arms.
Just dying for her charms.
Tomorrow I was….

VERSE
Tomorrow I was stupid.
I know that I was wrong.
I used to care about things
But now those days are gone.
Was kicking dust in someone’s eyes
It don’t seem right to fantasize.
I guess my timings off.
I think you’ve heard enough.

PRE-CHORUS
Tomorrow I was stupid.
Can you help me?
Save me?
Crave me?

CHORUS
I don’t need all that much.
Just a serpent’s fatal touch.
And Cleopatra’s arms.
Just dying for her charms.
Tomorrow I was…

INSTRUMENTAL BREAK

MIDDLE
I’m a narcissist who hates himself.
A fallen bottle from a shelf.
That never reached the ground.
And isn’t in some lost and found.
I guess I’m on my own.
A sinner who cannot atone
For things I never done
Tomorrow it has come.
The chicken’s home to roost.
Does that give you a kind of boost?
I’m sorry about this yelp,
You see
It is the foolish,
And the stupid’s…
Cry for help.

OUTRO
Tomorrow are you looking back
Down the track.
Hold on Jack!
Hit the brake!
You’re too damn late!

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  @sheslin  Feb 5

  I really really like the concept of this song and would love to do a collab with you! If you are interested email me.

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  @geoff61 Feb 5

  thanks Mike, I've been trying a 10-20 minute write just for fun. If anyone takes it on in FAWM then it can be developed through collaboration, if not it will get revisited post FAWM.

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  @mikeb Feb 5

  There's a lot in this lyric! As you're indicating it needs some work, I'd suggest that the 'Middle' is too long, not sure where the 'serpent' and Cleopatra' came from in the chorus, and the outro seems a little non-related too. But I have faith in your lyrical abilities to polish it up!