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Would love to hear set to music. I have rap in mind but who knows. Any takers? I'm open to collaboration regardless of genre.
Handcuffed
He grew up in the south
Felt prejudices pains
That left its mark
Like soiled stains
So he decided to fight
For justice and be
An activist pushing
Until he felt free
Had anger in his heart
Get even on his plate
But he wasn't aware
He was becoming what he hates
And when he got to what he wanted
It wasn't good enough
The inverse was happening
He was still handcuffed
He got state laws to shift
And no one could deny
The change was good
Folks got a high
But he carried this venom
That turned back the clock
Keeping the past alive
In all of his talk
Had anger in his heart
Get even on his plate
But he wasn't aware
He was becoming what he hates
And when he got to what he wanted
It wasn't good enough
The inverse was happening
He was still handcuffed
Laws transformed, all people had rights
But for some like him, there were many inner fights
Self esteem issues, still trying to prove
That the day hadn't come, where even he would approve
Had anger in his heart
Get even on his plate
But he wasn't aware
He was becoming what he hates
And when he got to what he wanted
It wasn't good enough
The inverse was happening
He was still handcuffed
@ustaknow Feb 5
It's a flowing lyric, so just as well singable too. Any lyric can be done so many ways and becomes another song, yet isn't, but is 😀 hahhh.
As dzd offers, - that's not a bad option to do anyway. Some folks I realize want only one version, but, hahhh, I got three here now, by accident, and glad I said yes; but, that is me and only applies to me 😀
- Oh, and, at the end of the lyric, - if that's a repeat, and if sung, there may be other options in orchestration; avoid monotony for a 4 min song, pending how it goes; just a flag that popped into my head. Again, once musicated, - it is what it is 😀
@dzdandcunfsd Feb 5
Oh I think this would make an interesting rap.......or at least a really nice spoken word poetry slam style to music ;/ I usually fail miserably when I try, but if fawm is closing and you get no takers I'd give it a whirl after I finish the Mischief one.
That read really smooth and nice, and really dig it!