[edit - I just chopped off the final verse as I'm not really sure what it added structurally, and the words were the worst of the lot]
I was aiming for Queens of the Stone Age, but think I ended up with overdriven George Formby.
At least that's a tick in the "micturation references" box for 2021. I realise this is very childish. The lyric (and voice recording) was done in a panic to meet a homelife deadline and is not to be pored over too earnestly, but I had fun trying to play the guitar again. I think last February was the last time I got it out. And it shows.
I want to improve my songwriting, so please point out glaring (or more subtle) horrors. Also production. As this probably demonstrates, I'm not really sure what to do with levels, effects, EQ, or any of that. I just mess around with it until I get bored. Is much jumping out as weird? I think the vocal, putting aside my limitations as a singer, is very flat but I don't know what to do to enliven it. Or is it too loud?
I have a sneaking suspicion I've messed up the drums with that repeated snare fill thing, but I've listened to it too much and can't tell. I think its in the wrong place? Or is it? If someone can be bothered to tell me what I've done wrong then that would be very helpful. As you can tell, I don't really understand drums.
Also, robo-bass is a bit rubbish, but there it is. I just can't play my bass as fast as required. Well, I can. It just sounds like an out of control wobble board.
I want you to stay
Like a rabbit wants traffic on a highway
"Did it my way"
I don't care what you say
but I heard each and every poison cliche
You'll go away
King for a day
You're king for the day
you've got so many reasons to be thankful
you're not thankful
You're in my way
Urine "My Way"
You're greyer than grey
You'll never pay the people you play
They are your prey
And so are wee