Raven

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I've been researching Ravens....they have been thought of differently by many cultures (good and bad), I chose to focus on a girl who only heard bad things and how her misconceptions led to my very favorite of endings....a sad one....YEAH!! LOL!! sorry, I tend to write this way. Celtic style music maybe?? Any ideas are welcome, I "hearted" this because I love a sad story, mine or anyone elses....thanks for stopping by friends!!

Lyrics

Raven
by Tammy
© 2014

A melancholy maiden
sat alone by a cool stream
when a bird had heard her tears
he flew to see why she weeps

his landing was so silent
that she hadn't realized
'til she saw her reflection
in the blackness of his eyes

her heart and mind were troubled
tales of ravens have been told
that they prey upon the dead
and are thieves, omens and ghosts!

bridge
Oh Raven,
fly away
fly away from me
please don't steal my soul
I'm alive you see
let me see my love
my home and family
why did I run away
please leave me be

While he flapped his shiny wings
he then shifted in his stance
his feet hopping up and down
eager to cheer her with his dance

in nervousness she stared
at the sheen of his feathers
black as death, she grew fearful
he was trying to scare her

her doubt grew into panic
she flung herself into the stream
she tripped and lay there bleeding
it's the raven's turn to weep

bridge
Oh maiden
don't run
don't run away from me
I won't capture your soul
I want you to be free
to be happy with your love
your home and family
why did you run away
to die in the stream

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  • @kahlo2013  5 weeks

    This is gorgeous in its haunting images and bittersweet metaphor of love and life! I love the poetry in the verses and the clarity and cadence in the chorus. It is very well crafted.

  • @marvsmooth  6 weeks

    Yes I thought of Poe too, but then you have that fantastic twist right there!

    Great lyrics with brilliant rhymes and near-rhymes, lovely pacing, and just pure knockout!

    Awesome smile

  • @jaegerin  Feb 11

    I had to think of Poe, too, and SJ Tucker's "Ravens in the Library".
    This is a great story and I'm another one who kind of likes melancholy endings. Also a good lesson about self-fulfilling prophecies and the dangers of pre-judging.

  • @gerrybhoy Feb 6

    That's a good write, reads very easily, I particularly liked this verse,

    While he flapped his shiny wings
    he then shifted in his stance
    his feet hopping up and down
    eager to cheer her with his dance

    Nice and visual, I enjoyed.

  • @kristi  Feb 5

    I enjoyed all the pictures this brought to mind with all your detailed descriptions. I like how it twists at the end too and shifts POV. Good one!

  • @kevinemmrich  Feb 5

    I thought I had commented on this one before. I guess not. Well I am back for another read (ha, ha). Yes, this is an excellent little story and I would suggest writing it out and having pictures and Boom! a book is born.

    Very full and evocative. Well done, for sure.

  • @spiritdancer  Feb 5

    I love Ravens! Good job on this one! I like the ending even though it's sad. Good twist!

  • @ericdistad  Feb 5

    Very much in line with the Celtic tradition. smile I love the story you tell and how it comes together. I could hear this to a gentle harp. Wonderfully sad.

  • @marijequerida Feb 5

    Awesome lyric! It's such a nice idea to write about Ravens. Love this smile

  • @ferry0123 Feb 5

    Thanks for stopping by mine, Tammy. Good to read your lyrics, I enjoy them.

  • @funkdaddy Feb 4

    I dig it smile Sort of makes me think of something along the lines of a Dave Matthews type tune.

  • @donna  Feb 4

    I love a raven song, especially if it's melancholy. smile

    Good story, and nice twist on the raven actually having had no bad intentions. As with much human behaviour, it's our fear that most often does us in, rather than any reality. wink

  • @devin  Feb 4

    Great story here... I can see why this one stands out... I agree! smile

    Celtic? Ravens? Heavy endings? Let me page @Leslie to check this out... these are three of her favorite things!

  • @johnstaples  Feb 4

    When I saw the heart I decided to give it a shot. When I got here and realized it would be sad...I pulled up a chair! This is a great raven song! I like the story and the sad ending felt just right in such a tale. Really liked this line, "'til she saw her reflection/in the blackness of his eyes". I agree this would make a nice celtic tune. Very well done!!

  • @wyatt  Feb 4

    Ravens always bring Poe to mind for me
    Poe is probably your hero Tammy if you love sad and macabre . He was a master
    Quite sad but well done nonetheless