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Gone Shopping

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Liner Notes:

So the melody of the first line of this song is the exact same as the melody of the first line of a song I wrote earlier. I knew it sounded familiar but it wasn't till it was recorded and I listened back that I figured it out. Oh well. It's fawm, no time to change it.

Lyrics:

You said you were going to the store
You were coming back in a minute
Hours later and you’re not here
It’s an empty bed without you in it

You’ve been gone the whole damn evening
I don’t know where you’ve been
It doesn’t matter anymore
What kind of trouble you’re in

I feel. I feel so bad.
I feel. I feel so bad.
You left me all alone
Out here on my own

If you come back to me this evening
I will hold you in my arms
I feel lost when you’re not here
So let me keep you from harm

I feel. I feel so bad.
I feel. I feel so bad.
You left me all alone
Out here on my own

© 2010 T.C. Elliott

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marklberry 6 days ago

Great re-usage. Perfect pacing. Ties in with a story within "the Liars Club" that I'm reading about going out for cigarrettes and coming back a year later. First question, "Did you get the cigarettes?"
Ross Durand 3 weeks ago

There's a true story in my extended family of a husband who "went out for cigarettes" and never came back. This is a poignant sentiment, and the chorus and focused simplicity of the song play into that poignancy.
Mal 4 weeks ago

Love that chorus! You know, I think I'm just now noticing what a rich voice you have.
expendablefriend 1 month ago

Punchy chorus, that melody really makes the listener sit up and take notice. Nice one.
Stephen Wordsmith 1 month ago

Good song. I love the chord progression: it makes me inclined to sit and listen sympathetically to the eloquent words of this troubadour.
Debs 1 month ago

I've stolen from my own songs before, TC. Love the melody on "I feel so bad" - the whole song feels very natural, and is really darn catchy! Love the guitar solo after the instrumental section. You do what you do so well, glad to have finally stopped by.
The Vinyl Flies 1 month ago

Very enjoyable

I think I've mentioned this on past songs, but if not, I'll say it now: GREAT VOICE!
Psy-T 1 month ago

Lovely song. Enjoyed it.
Becca 1 month ago

Don't feel bad!! We're all here minute/ in it.... nice. (Good to see you again, BTW)
cheerios 1 month ago

i'm a tc elliot fan. great tun. awesome lyric. good vibe all around. excellent performance
Mike Debenham 1 month ago

Nice one, T.C. Good forthright lyrics and honest performance.
Roel van Veldt 1 month ago

Funny that you write twice the same song differently.

I sometimes catch myself too singing a line I already sang in another song. But as long as you sample yourself and you don't overdo it, it can be funny.

Nice song!

Roel
Tom Slatter 1 month ago

Great song, TC. I really like the chorus. Also, I really wouldn't worry about plagiarising yourself. I do that all the time...
Kevin Emmrich 1 month ago

I think you're allowed to plagiarize yourself (ha, ha). Good first song. Keep 'em coming.
G Slade 1 month ago

ah..who cares if it's the same rhythm...it sounds good..nice start to fawm sir
Maeflower 1 month ago

Oh I forgot how much I love listening to your tunes, Tom. I agree with AXL....I could hear the song in two entirely distinct ways--from the perspective of a child whose parent left and from the perspective of a guy whose gal stepped out....either way it's simple and powerful. The chorus is really hooky....I have a feeling I'll be humming this one later today.
t-spoon 1 month ago

Nice work- great vocal performance. And very nice subtle solo at end. Dont worry - all my songs sound the same to me. This is a keeper.
Billy Sea 1 month ago

Tom, this is awesome. Very forceful delivery of some powerful and emotional lyrics. Loved this!
AXL 1 month ago

Evokes some childhood memories when my parents would come home late...
Tim Fatchen 1 month ago

Liner notes: don't worry, be happy...ooops...glad to see someone else has the problem of recycling their melodies unintetnionally. That's a good lifting chorus TC. I'd say if it ever came to a chosie, drop the other and go with this.
John Crossman 1 month ago

Based on your Liner Notes, I want half of my money back! I'm glad to see you on the boards, bro.

It's sweetly sour and effective. I also really, really like the jump on the chorus melody, nice performance there too, and it absolutely makes the song. As a result, the last 2 chorus lines were a bit of a melodic let down in comparison. Just an unsolicited thought. Maybe if they maintain some of the energy of the first 2... Overall, really well put together, very natural, and you should definitely add this to your live performance list.
Jerry Collins 1 month ago

You do understand she was out with a man, right? Of course she was out with a man. Oh, she went to the store...to go shopping. My insecurity...and over imagination...lol

Great job on this TC
mike skliar 1 month ago

Really fine stuff here. I particularly love the chorus with the melody leaps on the 'I feel' - really accomplished, both performance- wise and composition- wise. I wish i could think of melody like that sometimes!